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Post by Izzy on Aug 13, 2008 15:14:26 GMT 10
Ahh.... poor Abby! Very good update!!!!
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Post by daniella on Aug 16, 2008 9:14:34 GMT 10
Update...
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Chapter 14: Saying good - bye...
Cedars – Sinai Hospital Los Angeles, California 09:34 PM
Luka was still in his wife's room at the ICU, when he heard a knock on the door... Dra. Miller, who helped in Danijela's operation, entered, with a chart on her hands...
She approached Luka.
'I'm sorry, Mr. Kovac... we did our best to try to save her...' she said.
He nodded, still looking at his wife.
'I know this is not the time to ask you this, maybe you don't want to talk about it, but I need to ask...' she said, sitting beside him. 'I need your consent to do this kind of operation...'
‘You want permission to use her organs, don't you?' he asked.
'Yes...' said the doctor, quietly.
‘I understand...' he said. 'Danijela always wanted it...'
'So I have you authorization?' the doctor asked.
He didn't say anything, but nodded, looking away.
'Your wife can save a lot of people...for example, we have this young lady... she's 23 years old, in Chicago and needs a heart... she and your wife are compatible and...'
He nodded again. Dra. Miller saw this was the time to stop.
'I know this is hard, but I need you signature on these papers...' she said, after a few seconds.
Luka looked at the chart and sighed... he looked at the papers who would change his life forever and picking up a pen, wrote his name on it... Dram Miller picked the chart from his hands gently and got up...
'How much time I have left with her?' he asked.
'About ten minutes...' she said.
He nodded. The doctor exited the ICU room, leaving Luka alone with Danijela...
He didn't wanted to wait any longer... it was devastating for him to be with her in this state... he passed his hand over her hair and kissed her on the forehead... she was still warm...
'I love you Danijela...' he whispered. 'You'll always be in my heart...'
With that, he looked to her a few seconds, got up and exited the room...
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When he walked back to the waiting room, a nurse was with his children...
He looked at her and nodded... she got up and walked out of the room...
Jasna and Marko looked at their father.... he was sad...
'Where's mama, tata?' Marko asked...
Luka knelt in front of them... it would be hard telling them...
He looked down at his hands... sighing, he said...
'Well, the doctors operated her, but they couldn't save her... she died...'
Jasna felt her eyes sting with tears... Marko just leaned his head over his knees...
No...' Jasna said...
She wanted to go and see her mother... she got up, but Luka's arm prevented her to go... instead, she hugged her father hard...
She started to cry and Luka felt tears in his eyes too... he looked over at Marko and put him in a hug too...
'Sve ide biti u redu…' (It's going to be ok...) he said. 'Ja sam ovdje...' (I'm here...)
The scene was touching for everyone who was watching it... even to doctors and nurses...
Minutes passed by, until he got up with both children... he walked to the elevators, saying, over and over...
'Mi jesu iduæi u biti u redu....' (We will be ok...)
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Post by suzanne on Aug 16, 2008 9:31:22 GMT 10
That was really good!! does this mean Luka and Abby are gonna meet soon?? Keep going, I wanna know what happens next!!!
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Post by Izzy on Aug 16, 2008 18:23:58 GMT 10
Well I said it before... I like your story very much... but considering the new rules, I will explain myself I think you managed well with the level of expressing Luka gives about the death of his wife. The immediate comfort he gives his children and the practical thinking... Luka is not a man who express a lot of emotions... So very well done!
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Post by daniella on Aug 17, 2008 1:19:00 GMT 10
Thank you... I update tonight... Well, I didn't think about it when I wrote it, but now that you mentioned it, you're right... sometimes I don't enter right into the characters because I try different scenarios and I'll have to keep the characters into the story... so I guess it's a little difficult for me...
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Post by larue on Aug 17, 2008 3:12:41 GMT 10
I thought i t was nicely done as well. This sentence sounds a little strange though...
' You're going to take off her organs, don't you ? '
Maybe "You want permission to use her organs," would work better???
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Post by daniella on Aug 17, 2008 7:33:50 GMT 10
Ok... I'll correct and start to work on the update...
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Post by daniella on Aug 17, 2008 9:56:07 GMT 10
Here's the update... hope you like it...
PS: I don't know what's the time difference between Chicago and Los angeles... I'm guessing about two hours... this pass on the same time Danijela died...
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Chapter 15: Attack...
Parking lot, County General Chicago, Illinois 11:35 PM
She didn't see the man approaching her from behind...
He put his hand over her mouth; She tried to free herself.
'Don't scream or I'll cut your throat...' he whispered in her ear...
She breathed hard and nodded. She knew he was serious when she felt the knife in her neck...
'I'm going to release you... don't scream...' he ordered as he put his hand off her mouth. She swallowed hard and nodded. ‘Turn around...’
Abby turned around and saw a man, wearing a black ski mask and glasses... he had a big knife...
'Wha... what... do you... want...?' she asked, nervous. 'I have my purse... and my car... you can take my car... just let me get my son...'
'I don't want anything... only you...' he said, opening the zipper from his pants..
At this time, Andrew woke up. He heard voices and wondered who was with his mother...
Mommy?' he asked, rubbing one eye.
The man nodded at her, putting the knife near her body. She turned to the car and said:
'I'm okay, Andrew...'
Her voice was trembling.... she was shaking and had tears in her eyes...
Abby turned to the man and pleaded:
'Please, not in front of him...'
Andrew sat on seat to see what was going on... his mom looked nervous... he saw his mom and a man... he had a big pointed knife...
'Mom...' he screamed.
The man got frightened and pressed the knife into Abby... she cried out...
'Ahhh... Andrew, run...' she said.
Opening the back door quickly, Andrew started to run. He saw his mom fighting with the man...
The man picked up Abby's hair and pulled it behind, making her look up... she looked terrified at him...
'You'll be sorry for this...' he said.
Them, he pushed the knife into her...
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Andrew knew he had to look for help and he knew the closer place was County... he dried his tears from his face as he run into the emergency...
He run to the reception... Frank saw him and knelt on the floor.
'Andrew what happened?' Frank asked, putting his hands on the boy's shoulders.
'Please...' he said, still crying. 'My mom...'
'What happened with your mom?' Frank asked again. 'Is she ok?'
'The man...' Andrew said.
'Dr. Morris?' Frank called.
Morris was walking near the reception and he saw the scene. He walked to them.
'Andrew, where's your mom?' Morris asked him, leaning and putting his hands on his knees.
'You have to help her...' Andrew cried out. 'The man... he had a knife…'
Morris felt his blood freeze.... Abby and he were always fighting, but she was still his friend...
'Pratt !' he called. 'Call the paramedics and the police, Frank...'
Turning to Haleh, he said:
'Quickly... pick the defibrillator...'
She nodded...
Pratt walked into the reception and saw Andrew, Morris and Frank, calling emergency...
'What's going...' he asked, but was cut off.
'It's Abby...' Morris said.
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Post by suzanne on Aug 17, 2008 20:56:35 GMT 10
That was really good!! I love the way you set the scene, I could see it in my head!! Poor Abby and Luka!! Cant wait to read more!!!
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Post by abbysinthe on Aug 18, 2008 1:51:15 GMT 10
Shouldn't this be labeled "OOC"? Neither Abby nor Luka are really in line with canon characterization.
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Post by daniella on Aug 20, 2008 7:18:04 GMT 10
Update...
Next chapter: They started doing CPR... Pratt was breathing on her mouth and Morris was trying to make her heart start beating again...
' Come on, Abby... ' said Morris. ' React...'
Now...
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Chapter 16: Deconstructioned family...
Cedars – Sinai Hospital 11: 02 PM
The doctors were removing Danijela's main organ, the heart... it and the others organs were going to be transplanted...
'It's a magnificent organ...' Dra. Miller said, when she pulled the organ out and put it on a plastic bag with lots of ice. Then the nurse closed it and put it in another bag, a termical one. She then gave it to the transport nurse, who would fly to Chicago...
'Good luck...' Dr. Hill said to the nurse...
He then continued, concentrated on the operation...
'Now, the liver and the kidneys..' he said.
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Luka turned off the Explorer when they arrived in front of their home and sighed... He needed to be strong for his kids now...
He looked at his right side and saw Jasna, with her head down... Marko was sleeping, but Luka could see the trail of tears on his face through the mirror...
Looking back at Jasna, he said, sadly:
'Doæi... mi stiæi kod kuæe...' (Come... we arrived home...)
'JA ne ištanje to dolaze, tata... sve htijenje sjeæati se mama...' (I don't want to enter, Tata... everything reminds mama...)
Luka thought about what they were going to do now... his daughter was right... everything in the house would remind Danijela...
Starting the car again, he picked his cell phone and called his good friend... David McLaughlin picked his phone up after three rings...
'Hello?' he said.
Dave?' said Luka. 'I know that you were sleeping, but something happened... can we go to your home?'
David estranged Luka's voice and knew right away that something terrible had happened...
'Sure...' he said.
Luka thanked him and turned off the cell phone... looking once more to his house, they took off with the car...
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Post by suzanne on Aug 20, 2008 10:49:41 GMT 10
Jasna not wanting to go in, thats real sad and yet sweet too!! Great update and I hope Abby is going to be ok foor her sons sake!! Love it. Keep going!!
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Post by daniella on Aug 24, 2008 7:26:30 GMT 10
Hey, girls...
Sorry to say that this story is on hiatus ( but it's not definetly... just for a few weeks... ) I needed to fix my computer, so...
Sorry again... I know you want to know about Abby, but... it was needed... )
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Post by lubylover08 on Aug 31, 2008 6:41:01 GMT 10
your story is great!!! i really love it.. keep going well done
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Post by daniella on Sept 5, 2008 10:28:10 GMT 10
Hey girls, finally an update... Note: the hour is eleven too, it's still on the same hour Danijela died... not on the same hour as the last update... sorry about the confusion... XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Chapter 17: Rescue Parking Lot County Hospital, Chicago 11:42 PM Pratt and Morris ran to the parking lot... when Andrew saw his mother on the ground and a pool of blood surrounding her, he hugged Haleh and started to cry even harder. She took him away. Pratt started to do the resuscitation, breathing for her while Morris started to compress her chest, trying to re – start her heart... 'She's got three stab wounds...' Morris said. 'One on her chest, near the heart, one on her belly and one on her side, between the sixth and seventh ribs...' Pratt nodded. The paramedics arrived... 'Quickly, put an IV on her...' he said. 'I'm going to intubate her...' Gates, one of the paramedics nodded. 'Come on, Abby...' said Morris. 'React...' The time stopped... it was only a few minutes after the attack, but it appeared an eternity... Chunny arrived with the portable defibrillator... she tried to stay calm, but it was difficult... Morris waited till Pratt finish with the intubation, then quickly looked to see if there was a pulse... there was none... 'Turning on 200...' said Morris, picking up the paddles. 'Clear...' He shocked her... nothing... '300...' he said again. 'Clear...' Pratt got away... They waited a few seconds again... there was a beep sound, indicating a heartbeat... 'Let's get her inside, ASAP...' Pratt said. X ~ X ~ X They ran and entered on trauma 1 with Abby... Pratt was squeezing the oxygen balloon... Morris called Dubenko, then gave Abby a medicine for her heart... After her pressure was stabilized, they took her to the OR... XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Dani
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