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Post by Martine on Apr 20, 2009 21:38:13 GMT 10
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Post by baboune51 on Apr 21, 2009 7:44:56 GMT 10
beautiful story , poor Abby and Luka ! nice udapte !
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Post by FicWriter on Apr 23, 2009 15:46:31 GMT 10
Night Out
Part 9
by JD
With the patrons secured, their haul piled out of reach on the bar, the three moved back to the front of the restaurant, leaving their hostages alone for the first time since they had entered. Not surprisingly, most began to talk among themselves immediately, some simply to offer comfort to spouses, others to complain, though wisely not loud enough to be overheard. Abby's concern chief concern was on Luka as he struggled again to sit. She couldn't ignore the force of the blow the man had delivered to him, and as she observed his movements, she looked for signs of a potential head injury.
"Luka, are you all right" She kept her voice low, barely above a whisper as she spoke.
"I don't know." Once he was fully upright, he shook his head, only to instantly regret it as the room seemed to spin forcing him to close his eyes in response.
"I think my head's going to explode, if I don't throw up first." He winced as he tested the restraints on his wrists and found himself rewarded with a tightening of them.
"I'm sorry, Luka." Abby's concern was written clearly on her face as she studied his face for changes from her earlier exam of him.
"Sorry for what?" He shifted his full attention to her as he picked up the change in the tone of her voice.
"For not listening to you earlier, when you said you felt like something wasn't right, I should have trusted your instincts, and I didn't." Abby dropped her eyes from his face with the admission.
"Abby, look at me." Luka waited until she was looking at him again before continuing.
"You couldn't have known this was going to happen, I didn't even know what was wrong, don't blame yourself." He glanced toward the entrance where the men were gathered then back to her.
"They've got what they wanted, there's no reason for them to stay, they're probably already getting ready to leave, you'll see." The words were no sooner out of his mouth then there was a yell from the door.
"Damn! Joey, go check the back, son of a bitch, there are cops outside." Albert had drawn the curtain back to look over the street and now let it fall as he turned to his brother with raised hands.
"What are you waiting for? Would you check the back."
to be continued...
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Post by suzanne on Apr 23, 2009 18:57:46 GMT 10
Ohhhh!! Don't let anything bad happen to Luby!! Update soon!!
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Post by FicWriter on Apr 27, 2009 14:59:53 GMT 10
Night Out
Part 10
by JD
The increase in the tension of the robbers had an immediate effect on their hostages and while some simply gave into the tears born of their fear, among most there was a pronounced increase in the level of the conversations among them.
"Shut the f*ck up! So help me I'm gonna start shooting people if you don't shut your mouths." The announcement from the robber stunned almost everyone into immediate silence, not just because of the threat but because he was the one that to this point had been the silent one, the one they thought they had least to fear from. Clearly, tensions were rising and not just among the hostages.
Bobby...back off, we need to figure a way out of this." Albert returned to the front window, pulling the curtain aside only enough to get a glimpse of the street outside.
"Why don't you just let everyone go, before things get worse then they already are?" The words were out of Luka's mouth before Abby could stop him.
"You were told to keep your mouth shut already." Whether it was fear or something more that drove him, it was the youngest of the three that reacted to Luka's words and before either of the other two could stop the man he was already in front of Kovac. His first kick doubled the Croat over, the ones that followed would leave him gasping for breath on the floor before Albert could pull his brother off.
"What the hell are you doing? You want to kill him? You were supposed to be checking the back alley, keeping an eye on what's going on out there, and you, get your ass up." After assuring himself that Joey was finally doing as he'd been told Albert nudged Luka with the toe of his shoe, when he made no effort to comply he reached down and grabbed a handful of his shirt and jerked him upright.
"I said I wanted you up, so help me, you're just asking me to turn him loose on you again." His voice held the promise of a threat that he'd have no trouble acting on.
"Can't you see he's hurt...untie me, I'll keep him sitting if that's what you want." Abby offered the compromise without worrying about the consequences to herself. As the robber released his hold on Luka's shirt and he watched the man simply curl into himself again he realized he'd have to make a choice.
"Alright, but you try anything, and I mean anything, and he's the first to die. You got me?" As he finished speaking Albert stepped behind Abby and untied her hands.
"I mean it, you get him up and you keep him up, anything happens he dies first, then I kill that little blond girl there, you make sure he understands that." Without waiting for her response he stepped away from their hostages.
"Bobby! What's happening in the back alley?" This was not how things were supposed to have gone down.
To be continued...
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Post by cryurname on Jun 3, 2009 13:36:25 GMT 10
I just wanted to tell you how much I've enjoyed this story so far. You're equally great at writing both Luka and Abby, which is an astounding feat as most fic writers lean towards one or the other. I can't wait to see what you write next, and if you ever need a beta, you can send me a message on this board or hit me up on LJ (my name there is roysbrat). I'd be happy to help out.
Sage
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Post by FicWriter on Jun 23, 2009 8:25:48 GMT 10
Thank you.
I apologize for the delays in getting back to the story, I deal with a series of health issues and am dealing with high pain levels right now which are affecting my ability to focus on writing. I'm trying to get back into the right mindset, but, it's just not quite clicking and I refuse to post anything sub-par, please bear with me, I'm sure it'll get better eventually, it always does.
JD
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Post by Martine on Jun 24, 2009 4:07:14 GMT 10
No worries, you get better first ... we'll wait
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Post by suzanne on Jun 24, 2009 7:50:40 GMT 10
No worries, you get better first ... we'll wait Exactly make sure your ok first!!
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Post by sissa on Jun 26, 2009 4:05:34 GMT 10
Luka is a terribe hostage, at some point "I" wanted to beat him too - very softly Hopefully, he got the message by now. Having said that, people should not be allowed to beat him on his face. He´s so cute.
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Post by FicWriter on Jul 11, 2009 11:14:25 GMT 10
Just a quick update, I saw my doctor last week, and in addition to changing one of the medicines I'm on, I also received injections in both shoulders that we hope will alleviate some of the pain. With luck this will allow me to regain the concentration I need to start getting my head back into writing. Thank you to everyone for their patience and understanding as I work through this.
JD
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Post by FicWriter on Sept 4, 2009 16:39:41 GMT 10
Finally I have good news after so long of nothing but bad. I learned the results of my last blood draw and I'm up to 3.8, only .1 from what is considered the "normal" range. No more restrictions from going places, and my doctor is fairly confidant the danger associated with the allergic reaction to my newest medication change has finally passed.
I also saw my eye surgeon today regarding the cataracts I have in both eyes, and I go back tomorrow for additional pre-surgery tests before going under the knife for my first eye on the 17th. After a couple of weeks recovery time, I'll go back in, and the second eye will be done on October 1st. I'm hoping that by mid-Oct I will be able to fully concentrate on writing again, and once again start providing you with the chapter updates and new one-shot stories that you have all been so patiently waiting for.
Thanks to everyone who has sent their positive thoughts, they've been much appreciated.
JD
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Post by Martine on Sept 4, 2009 19:06:11 GMT 10
Oh that's good news. I hope you get well soon again. I wish you all the best !
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