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Post by ERFanRach on Jan 12, 2007 6:20:14 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!!
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Post by Melimelo on Jan 12, 2007 7:16:06 GMT 10
Yes good story...all the little moments when I thought they were flirting with each other or strangely drawn back to each other and nothing actually happened and we were left hoping for something to happen I like how you have woven a few other things in there as well.
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kia
Duchess of Luby
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Post by kia on Jan 12, 2007 8:20:25 GMT 10
your story is great. i love the way you mix past and present times. it's very original. you deserve a karma!
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Post by jaana on Jan 12, 2007 17:05:39 GMT 10
Great fic! Keep going!
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Post by debsxx2006xx on Jan 13, 2007 6:28:09 GMT 10
Moments in time. AbbySummer 2003 I walk to the door banging a few times before looking around waiting for the door to open “Hi” I’m way to jolly for this time of night but hell it’s been one shift and he’s what I need. “Hey.” His smile grows bigger which can only be a good thing “thought I owed you a visit” he doesn’t say anything “and I was invited for dinner?” he looks at his watch. “It’s ten o’clock.” “I didn’t think you would take me up on it.” Oh crap here some comes “oh” and what a bitch I don’t know what it is about her but I just don’t like her. I nod my head and she smile turning towards Luka great just what I needed a porno in front of my eyes I wait for her to go before walking past Luka “where she going” and into his apartment. “Ah back to her boyfriend. He shuts the door “thought you two were…” why do I feel happy about this. “No yeah ah it’s nothing.” I nod my head like I know what it’s like “ah ok” I walk to the couch sitting myself down he shortly follows. “You want a drink?” I shake my head no “I want a friend” I say lifting an eyebrow waiting for him to ask what’s wrong.Early January 2006 I walk up three stairs then back down two “come on Abby its only Luka” I force myself up the rest of the way. “Bang…Bang…Bang.” I can hear voices a woman’s voice good I hope he doesn’t have someone in they I mean he asked me for a drink…. “Hey Abby.” He opens the door taking me back a little “hey” I smile as he closes the door to himself hiding his lounge “sorry are you busy?” who is she I’ll kill her. “No what’s up?” I close my eyes taking a deep breath “fancy that drink?” ask feeling bad that I turned him down. “Thought you had a date with our couch?” I smile laughing slightly that he is quoting me on it “he bailed” I lean against the doorframe edging myself closer. “Oh so I’m second best?” The door comes open and he ushers me in “your never second best to me” I try to suck up. “Stop crawling your present is on the table.” I turn back and smile “Present you got me a present?” he follows me down the stairs. “It’s not much but it’s very you.” I walk to the table and start to unwrap the paper “wow I can’t believe I got a present” I say watching him watching me “oh wow” it’s a beautiful silver necklace with a heart holding what I think is a diamond. “Its real and white gold.” He walks towards me and turns me around helping me to slip it on “it’s beautiful Luka” I turn back to face him. “Your worth it and hell it looks way better on you then me.” I blush as we stand in front of each other neither wanted to break the silence so we don’t we just stand and make another memory for the collection.
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Post by *Natalie* on Jan 13, 2007 6:36:56 GMT 10
Great update Natalie x
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Post by luby2534 on Jan 13, 2007 6:39:25 GMT 10
Lovely update !!!
Totally loving this !!
1 Karma 4 u !!
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Post by ERFanRach on Jan 13, 2007 7:10:50 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!!
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Post by steffi1986 on Jan 13, 2007 7:47:18 GMT 10
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Post by jaana on Jan 13, 2007 18:14:28 GMT 10
Great update!
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Post by debsxx2006xx on Jan 13, 2007 23:12:03 GMT 10
Moments in time. January 2006 Luka“Oh wow Abby that necklace is beautiful where did you get it?” When I hear the word Abby I spin around and see her walk towards the desk where everyone is staring at her “yeah it’s nice,” I say smiling. “Oh it was a present.” She plays it down as all the nurses curl around her to have a good look “hi” I mouth over the crowd. “Looks expensive who’s it from what’s his name?” I watch her blush as the questions get a little heated “come on back to work” I warn them all giving her a bit of breathing space. “Thanks.” She smiles taking a few charts from me “hey is that it?” I ask wondering if she is going to say anything about last night. “I have people to see places to go.” She smiles at me flashing me that million dollar smile I follow her gently gripping her wrist I pull her into an empty room “anybody I know?” I ask pressing her against the wall. “Luka…” My face is inches away from hers her hand runs down my cheek as I slid my leg between hers “glad you didn’t forget my name” she smiles “I mean you were calling it out all night” she blushes. “Someone could walk in.” I catch her bottom lip with mine teasing her forcing her to give in and she does the charts drop to the floor and her hands go behind my head pushing me towards her mouth. January 10 2006“It’s beautiful Luka” She turns back to face me “Your worth it and hell it looks way better on you then me” she always looks beautiful diamond or not. “Your too kind.” I inch closer to her “I’m glad you came” I reach up and touch the side of her face “I’ve been thinking lately” she tilts her head into my touch. “You thinking?” She giggles out loud and I make my move I press my lips to hers but she pulls back pushing off my chest. “What are you doing?” She stands in front of me she looks angry pissed even “I thought it was what you wanted?” I thought the signals were clear I thought she was giving them back. “I better go.” I follow her gripping her wrist “ok I’m an ass but don’t say you didn’t feel it too” I felt alive for the first time since she left me. “Were friends?” She bites her finger nails “I’m sorry” I turn away expecting to hear the door slam but nothing and when I turn back she’s still standing on the bottom step. “If you hurt me this time I’ll hate you forever!” I smile hearing her say what I think she is “are you…” I ask walking towards her but she jumps on me wrapping her legs around my waist. “Shut up and kiss me.” I hold her body to mine as our lips meet I don’t let go as I walk her to the bedroom.
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Post by ERFanRach on Jan 14, 2007 0:41:48 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!!
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Post by daniella on Jan 14, 2007 1:22:23 GMT 10
So romantic... i loved it... good work... dani
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Post by *Natalie* on Jan 14, 2007 2:55:34 GMT 10
YEH!!! Great update
natalie x
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Post by strizzy on Jan 14, 2007 9:03:38 GMT 10
Fantastic start!!! Really enjoying reading this!!!
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