Post by ninabrasil (Marina) on Aug 30, 2006 10:52:52 GMT 10
Okay, I've never done this before and english is not my first language, so please tell me what you think I should improve, how to make it better etc. This is a scene I've always wanted to see on the show and thought it would fit well after 'Strange Bedfellows'. Please review and let me know what you think
Nina
Luka is sitting on the couch with Abby’s head on his shoulder and a carton of ice cream between them. He can’t stop thinking about how much he hurt her (once again) when he said he was going to Darfur to help Carter.
The look on her face reminded him of that fateful night about 5 years ago, the night that never left his mind. He had hurt her so much with his words and today, he managed to do it again. Looking down at Abby now, with one hand resting on her baby bump and the other one happily feeding herself a spoonful of chocolate ice cream, he couldn’t help but think how forgiving she was – of course she said some pretty harsh things to him that night but at least they were true, he was still married to Danijela, mostly because e felt guilty about loving someone else. He did love Abby, ever since that day at the ambulance bay when she kissed him, he just didn’t have the guts to tell her. All this thoughts were running around in his head, preventing him to hear her calling his name.
- LUKA!!
He looked at her startled and she chuckled at the face he made.
- Is everything alright? You seem far away… - Abby said looking worried, and with a disappointed look in her face she added – If you wanna go so badly you should just call Carter and tell him you’ll go. I’m going to be just fine on…
- Hey – he stopped her mid-sentence – That’s not what I was thinking about. I don’t want to go to Darfur, Abby. I could never leave you again.
She looked at him relieved and kissed him lightly on the lips.
- What’s wrong, then? What were you thinking about?
- You.
She looked down and fiddled with the ice cream, embarrassed.
He slid a finger under her chin and turned her head up.
- I’m so sorry, Abby.
Seeing her confused look he said.
- I’m so sorry about today, about that night we broke up, about hurting you so much…
- Luka, I hurt you too. It’s okay now. We’re together and that’s all that maters.
- No, Abby, I need to say this.
She shifted her weight on the couch to face him completely and nodded, waiting.
- All the things I said that night were so untrue. I never meant any of them. You are beautiful and so special. You’re an amazing woman, Abby. The most beautiful and most special. And I never wanted to go to Darfur, I just thought it was a way of making up to Carter, I mean, he did save my life.
- The thing I want most in this world is be here with you and our baby. – He said, resting his hand on her belly and smiling as she put her had on top of his and they felt the baby kick, as if it was happy that his/her parents were okay.
- I love you, Abby. I have loved you since our first kiss. And I’m never leaving you or the baby again, 'cause this is where I want to be, with my family.
Wiping a tear at the corner of her eye with her free hand, she asked:
- Are you done?
Luka nodded, still smiling at her.
- We love you, too.
He never thought he could be so happy with such simple words. Just the thought of her referring to herself and the baby as a ‘we’ made him the happiest man on the planet.
He looked at her and lovingly held her close. In that position they slept, embraced, with their hands together caressing the baby through Abby’s belly.
So?What do you say??
Nina
Luka is sitting on the couch with Abby’s head on his shoulder and a carton of ice cream between them. He can’t stop thinking about how much he hurt her (once again) when he said he was going to Darfur to help Carter.
The look on her face reminded him of that fateful night about 5 years ago, the night that never left his mind. He had hurt her so much with his words and today, he managed to do it again. Looking down at Abby now, with one hand resting on her baby bump and the other one happily feeding herself a spoonful of chocolate ice cream, he couldn’t help but think how forgiving she was – of course she said some pretty harsh things to him that night but at least they were true, he was still married to Danijela, mostly because e felt guilty about loving someone else. He did love Abby, ever since that day at the ambulance bay when she kissed him, he just didn’t have the guts to tell her. All this thoughts were running around in his head, preventing him to hear her calling his name.
- LUKA!!
He looked at her startled and she chuckled at the face he made.
- Is everything alright? You seem far away… - Abby said looking worried, and with a disappointed look in her face she added – If you wanna go so badly you should just call Carter and tell him you’ll go. I’m going to be just fine on…
- Hey – he stopped her mid-sentence – That’s not what I was thinking about. I don’t want to go to Darfur, Abby. I could never leave you again.
She looked at him relieved and kissed him lightly on the lips.
- What’s wrong, then? What were you thinking about?
- You.
She looked down and fiddled with the ice cream, embarrassed.
He slid a finger under her chin and turned her head up.
- I’m so sorry, Abby.
Seeing her confused look he said.
- I’m so sorry about today, about that night we broke up, about hurting you so much…
- Luka, I hurt you too. It’s okay now. We’re together and that’s all that maters.
- No, Abby, I need to say this.
She shifted her weight on the couch to face him completely and nodded, waiting.
- All the things I said that night were so untrue. I never meant any of them. You are beautiful and so special. You’re an amazing woman, Abby. The most beautiful and most special. And I never wanted to go to Darfur, I just thought it was a way of making up to Carter, I mean, he did save my life.
- The thing I want most in this world is be here with you and our baby. – He said, resting his hand on her belly and smiling as she put her had on top of his and they felt the baby kick, as if it was happy that his/her parents were okay.
- I love you, Abby. I have loved you since our first kiss. And I’m never leaving you or the baby again, 'cause this is where I want to be, with my family.
Wiping a tear at the corner of her eye with her free hand, she asked:
- Are you done?
Luka nodded, still smiling at her.
- We love you, too.
He never thought he could be so happy with such simple words. Just the thought of her referring to herself and the baby as a ‘we’ made him the happiest man on the planet.
He looked at her and lovingly held her close. In that position they slept, embraced, with their hands together caressing the baby through Abby’s belly.
So?What do you say??