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Post by lubyfreaky on Nov 26, 2006 5:16:03 GMT 10
Great Update
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Post by ERFanRach on Nov 26, 2006 6:26:21 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!!
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Post by *Natalie* on Nov 26, 2006 7:39:48 GMT 10
Great update natalie x
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Post by jadestar on Nov 26, 2006 12:32:27 GMT 10
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Post by daniella on Nov 27, 2006 5:31:08 GMT 10
Thanks... going to do the next chapter... and I yet have to write two more storys along this one...
Dani
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Post by daniella on Nov 27, 2006 10:06:24 GMT 10
The next chapter... it's PG- 15...
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The sergeant barred his teeth as the plan was not going right. He lowered his binocular, observing the groups cross the street towards the ER.The thieves were very well organized.
' Did you get in contact with the FBI yet ? ' said the sergeant to one of his cops.
' Yeah, serge... they are send us some information... ' the cop said, hugging up the telephone.
They were in one of the superiors floors of the hospital, so they had access to the press and fax machine. The fax machine did some noises, meaning that it was receiving the information.
' Oh, no... 'said the cop, picking up the paper that was sent over.
' What ? ' asked the sergeant.
The cop gave the paper to him. The sergeant looked at it.
' S#%t... ' he exclaimed.
PS: this part was of the last part... I didn't post it because it was not finished... XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
Now Whit the chapter:
When the group of thieves entered in the waiting room of the ER, they were relieved, minus the hostages. The leader released Abby's arm. She looked at him while massaging up her arm.
' Abby, put in your code... ' said Luka, calling her. ' We need to go to the trauma room... this guy is crashing... '
Abby looked at him and went quickly to the number pad, putting her code in. The glass doors opened and she staid in front of one to let the group enter safe in the ER.
Luka and Carter quickly went towards the trauma 2. Carter saw a gurney and said.
' Let's put him on the gurney.. '
Luka nodded. They laid the thief on it and wheeled it on Trauma 2. The thieves following them.
' Abby, help Susan... ' Luka yelled.
' Okay...' she yelled back, going to help Susan with the injured thief.
The entered trauma 1 and sat him on the gurney. Abby went to get the material while Susan put the gurney up, so the thief had to recline on it.
' Karl, right ? ' asked Susan. The thief nodded. she continued to explain. ' Well, it appears that you are going to wait some hours... we will treat you the best way we can, but you'll need surgery... '
Abby turned back with a tray in her hands. Susan looked at her.
' Abby, clean the wound with some saline solution and let it open... ' said Susan while she was putting some gloves. ' I'm going to the bathroom... '
At this moment, they heard a commotion in the reception and all turned to look outside the trauma window. There was a guy being pulled on a seat by one of the thieves.
' Who is this ? ' asked Abby.
' I think it is... ' Susan said trying to see. 'Oh, my God... it's Jerry ! '
Susan and Abby looked at each other. ----------
The thief pushed Jerry to a seat in the reception desk.
' Stay right there... ' he said. 'Who are you ? '
' I'm Jerry Mankovic... ' Jerry said. ' I work here as a receptionist... '
He gave the thief his name tag. The thief pick it up, saw for a few seconds and throw it up on the desk.
' You, shut up... ' the thief said and turned to his companions. ' You two, keep an eye on him... I'm going to see how is Logan... '
The both of them nodded and the thief walked away.. ----------
Susan walked towards the bathroom. She made sure to do an eye contact with Jerry on her way.
' Hei, where are you going ? ' asked one of the thieves.
' I'm going to the bathrrom... ' Susan said, without looking at them.
They saw she walk away.
' I think I'm going to keep an eye on her... ' said one thief, walking behind her. ----------
Abby took of her gloves when she finished.
' I'm going to check your friend... ' she said, not expecting an answer.
She walked in the other trauma room and saw Luka and Carter working on the wounded guy. There was an IV on and the monitor was on, beeping with his vitals. she picked up some blue scrubs and a surgical mask. She put the on and walk beside Luka. She saw Carter trying to pick up the bullet inside the thief shoulder with a medical scissor. After a few seconds, Carter put it of with a bullet in the point.He showed it to his friends.
' How is he ? ' asked Abby.
' He's okay for now, but the bullet in his belly worries me... 'said Carter. ' Luka, I need you to check up his vitals while Abby and I open him... '
Luka nodded, giving space to Abby.
' What do you want ? ' asked Abby.
' I need a 12 blade... ' h carter said, breathing hard.
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Dani ( seeing Goran in Elecktra in the cable TV )
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Post by jadestar on Nov 27, 2006 23:39:59 GMT 10
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Post by ERFanRach on Nov 28, 2006 3:13:44 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!!
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Post by steffi1986 on Nov 28, 2006 5:58:58 GMT 10
great update, please do it again soon
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Post by *Natalie* on Nov 28, 2006 7:14:01 GMT 10
Great update Glad there safe... for now anyway natalie x
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Post by daniella on Nov 28, 2006 9:20:09 GMT 10
BTW did you enjoy Goran in Elektra? Yeah... I really did... It was me or he looked more thin in it... ( don't get me wrong... Goran is strong not fat ) but he seams more " well build " in ER... Maybe it was the clothes they made him use... PS: Doing the next part and post it tonight or tomorrow morning... and the next part will be strong and NC - 17 Dani
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Post by daniella on Nov 29, 2006 12:44:25 GMT 10
Here is another chapter...
Be careful... this part is NC - 17 for violence and briefly descriptions of rape ( not Abby though... I couldn't do it with her... )
So, minors be aware...
PS: Sorry if this subject offend most of the readers... this is the first and last time that I write something like that, but it was necessary for the story...
PS2: Sorry moderators, I promise not write about the topic anymore... XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
Susan opened the door and went to wash her hands. As she was looking down, she didn't notice she wasn't alone in the ladies bathroom.
Two hands picked her up quickly. She scared herself and almost screamed, but a hand was put abruptly in her mouth.
' Sssshhhh... ' said a voice behind her. ' Don't talk or I'm going to hurt you... '
Susan nodded. Her eyes wide with fear.
' Very good... ' the thief said. ' I'm going to release you now... '
When the thief released her, she turned and started to run. The thief grabbed her arm, stopping her. She turned and scratch him in the face, trying to release herself, but he didn't let go. He just put his other hand in his face and when he saw the blood, he slapped her in the face. Susan gave a step back and he grabbed her again, this time, pushing her against the bathroom mirror.
She fell after braking the glass. He picked her again and, twisting her arm behind her, made her bend over the sink.
' Now you'll see... ' said the thief, opening his belt.
Susan didn't fight him again, She knew that he was stronger then she and put her in a position that was impossible for her to do anything. Looking at the broken glass of the mirror, she saw a deep gash on the side of her face.
' I was looking at you all day... ' he said, now removing her slack. ' Your boyfriend has luck to have you... but I'm sure that he don't mind if I take a bite.. and after, I think I'm going to do your friend... she is really beautiful... '
Susan closed her eyes when he entered her forcefully. She only prayed to for him to let Abby away. It was too late for her, but not for her friend... ----------
Inside the hospital, the sergeant was on the phone with the FBI. He was put in a hold for four minutes now.
' Sarge ? ' one of his cops called.
' What ? ' he said. ' Don't you see that I'm busy ? '
' This are special agents Hopkins and Roggers, from the FBI... they want to speak with you... ' the officer said.
The sergeant sighed and put the phone on the cradle. He walked to them.
' Thank God you're here... 'he said to the agents. ' I was beginning to worry... '
' Where are they now ? asked Hopkins.
' Downstairs... in the ER... ' the sergeant said.
The agent nodded.
' What you can tell us about this group... ? ' asked the Sergeant.
' Well, sergeant... ? ' said agent Roggers.
' Phillips... '
' Sergeant Phillips... this is a terrorist group, called Star of Tomorrow... ' said Roggers. ' The are part of a cult, named The Chosen... their leader is Dillan Hunt, 37 years old... '
' Their base is located a few hours from here... ' said agent Hopkins.
The sergeant nodded.
' How organizes are they ? ' he asked after a few seconds.
' Very organized... ' said Hopkins. ' There is stories that they realized violent atacks... we catch them twice, but they alleged that we were chasing her because of their religion, so the director made us to release them... '
' Sergeant Phillips, there are how many hostages with them ? ' asked agent Roggers.
' Four doctors.. ' the sergeant said. ' Two women and two men... '
Roggers nodded.
' An ATF team is reading this way... ' said Hopkins. ' There is no guaranty however that the four of them are going to get out of there alive though...
The sergeant nodded.
' Only do your best... ' he said. ----------
Susan opened her eyes slowlly. After a few seconds, the things that happened were coming rushing over her. Tears appeared in her eyes when she remembered what happened to her. Sitting slowly she tried to focus, but closed her eyes quickly when a wave of dizziness flushed over her. Her head began to hurt, very strongly.
She sighed and put her hands in her head trying to diminish the dizziness. She had to get out of that bathroom and now. She knew her friends should be worried about her taking so long. Abby and Luka... John... oh, my God... John... he would be devastated when he knew...
Another wave of dizziness came and she put her hand on her mouth, only then realizing she was hurt because of the taste of blood. She put her hand away and looked at it. It was covered in blood.
Trying to calming herself, Susan took some deep breaths. When the dizziness stopped, she knelled on the ground and fixed her clothes. The inferior part of her body was hurting like hell, but she had to pull herself together, She had to get out of there...
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Hope it was not to graphic...
Dani
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Post by jadestar on Nov 29, 2006 13:10:41 GMT 10
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Post by daniella on Nov 29, 2006 13:33:44 GMT 10
Thanks...
Well, just one thing tough... The ATF team that I put in the story is a special team that the US government has to take care of drugs ( like DEA ) an things like that... I don't know how to write the abbreveature so I put it like portuguese...
Dani
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Post by daniella on Nov 30, 2006 12:26:57 GMT 10
Doing the next chapter... post it tomorrow... It will be more light this time... Dani
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