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Post by lubyfreaky on Feb 3, 2007 6:29:12 GMT 10
Great Update!! Loved : It's easy as bake!
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Post by luby4eva06 on Feb 3, 2007 8:50:59 GMT 10
great fic really sweet
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Post by *Natalie* on Feb 3, 2007 9:29:25 GMT 10
Great update loving this natalie x
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Post by hollygirl on Feb 4, 2007 5:13:09 GMT 10
I have decided that this fic will be set in PRESENT DAY
Chapter 7: I Won't Let Go
The last two days flew by. School started tomorrow and the days of endless play would come to an end. They would be replaced by 7 hours of school... But it wasn't going to be so bad since they would still be together. Abby and Luka sat atop her roof watching a moive... Even in early September the nights were growing cooler and there was a chill in the air from the wind that was picking up. Abby scootched closer to Luka and yawned.
"You have goosebumps." Luka said as he felt Abby's arm rubbing against his. He moved his arm around her shoulder, and pulled her closer to him, keeping her warm. She lay her head on his shoulder... and he lay his head against hers. "What time do you think it is?" Luka asked after a few minutes.
"I don't know.. probably bed time."
"I don't wanna go to bed."
"Me either. I don't want summer to be over."
"Me either."
"This was the best summer ever."
"Yeah... I thought coming to America would be no fun, but... I don't think I've ever had so much fun before."
"I know I haven't." Abby said, trying to suppress another yawn.
"You should go to sleep. You are tired."
"No I'm not." She said.
"Yeah you are."
"I'm not.. but we should probably go in.. your mom will probably start worrying."
"Probably." Luka laughed. He stood up and then took Abby's hand pulling her up. "You go first." He told her. She grabbed onto the tree, and then climbed down to another branch, followed by Luka. Abby put her foot down to step on the next branch, but missed, and screamed. Luka grabbed her hand, and held it, as she dangled from the branch. "Luka!"
"Hold on!" Luka said, tightening his grip on her. Both of her hands, were holding onto his one arm as he held onto the tree. Tears were streaming down Abby's cheeks as her foot searched for a branch below her. But there wasn't one she could reach. "Grab onto the branch." Luka said.
"No!"
"Abby you have to. Just let go with one hand and grab on to the branch, I'll still be holding onto your other hand. I won't let you fall."
"Nooo."
"You have to let go and grab onto the branch."
"I can't..."
"Do you trust me?"
"Yes." She said through her tears.
"Then you have to do it. I won't let go. I promise."
Abby looked at him, and then took her hand away from Luka's. She reached up and grabbed the branch. Luka still holding onto her other hand. As she started pulling herself up Luka started pulling her and then she was up. Sitting on it next to Luka. She threw her arms around him and he wrapped his around her, holding her tight.
"I told you I wouldn't let go."
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Post by Noora on Feb 4, 2007 5:29:55 GMT 10
IMO you should set this to present, cause you know about it more and that way, you could make it realistic. Loved the update! I hate the feeling of summer being over, go back to school, too. Was scared in some parts that she would fall and hurt herself.. But Luka the Trusty Prince saved the situation. Btw, are you gonna make any chapters of them being teenagers?
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Post by ERFanRach on Feb 4, 2007 5:33:16 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!
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Post by erfan228 on Feb 4, 2007 7:47:08 GMT 10
Great update!!! It was soo sweet! I think it's better in present day, it's eaiser!
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Post by *Natalie* on Feb 4, 2007 8:25:55 GMT 10
Great update.
Sorry if this has already been asked and i've just missed it... but how old are Abby and Luka meant to be at this point, 4/5?
natalie x
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Post by daniella on Feb 4, 2007 12:12:20 GMT 10
I think that both are seven... ( or eight, Luka is one year old then Abby... )
Great update... I loved it...
Dani
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Post by jacobsmommy on Feb 4, 2007 18:55:48 GMT 10
Great update Giving you KARMA.
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Post by luby2534 on Feb 4, 2007 19:23:56 GMT 10
Such a sweet update !!
More soon please !
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Post by hollygirl on Feb 5, 2007 13:49:40 GMT 10
Luka is 7 Abby is 6
Chapter 8: After School Surprise
The school day had come and gone in a flash. Mariana took Luka and Abby to school and the teacher sat them near each other, which wasn't the smartest move. They talked the whole day... laughing quietly... They ate lunch together, played together during recess... It was just like it had been only they spent most of the day in a classroom.
The bell rang, and they walked outside together looking for Maggie.. who had to take them home because Mariana had to be at the hospital where she got a job as a nurse. Abby hated having to go home with Maggie the most.. since she barely said two words to her since the day Eddie had left. Luka didn't care for Maggie.. but it was better than walking home.
The two of them walked through crowds of kids and parents and then Abby saw her and Eric's stroller. She was standing by a big oak tree... and next to her, Abby couldn't believe her eyes, was Eddie. Of course they were arguing but there he was. After the whole summer he was back. Abby dropped her backpack and took off running, leaving Luka behind.. he was confused until Abby started yelling, "Papa! Papa! Papa!" Over and over again until she was in his arms. He swung her around, covering her in kisses... squeezing her tighter, than he had ever squeezed her before.
Luka smiled, picked up her back pack and started walking toward them. That was Abby's dad. The man she had told Luka so much about. The smile on her face couldn't be compared to any of the ones he saw this summer and there were many. This one was different. "Hi Luka." Maggie said, taking Abby's bag from him.
"Hi." He said. Abby looked down at him and Eddie set her down, keeping his hand on the top of her head, stroking her soft brown hair. "Papa, this is Luka... Luka.. this is my papa." Eddie squatted down and took Luka's small hand, shaking it. "Abby's told me a lot about you.. All good things."
"Me too." Luka said. "Well.. I mean.. she told me about-"
"He gets it Luka." Abby said.
"Yeah." Luka said smiling at her.
"How about I take the kids with me.. and then you could go run your errands that you were telling me about." Eddie said.
"Well I can take Eric."
"I'll take him Maggie.. I mean for god sakes I haven't seen him in weeks. He's my son."
"Fine... fine." Maggie said angrily, before walking away. Abby looked up at Eddie, who smiled down at her.
"Why does Maggie always yell at you?"
"Because she's mean... and since when do you call her Maggie?"
"Since I decided I hated her.. and didn't want her to be my mommy."
"When I left?"
"Yup."
"You should still call her mom Abs.. At least until your 10." He joked. Abby and Luka both smiled and then followed him to his car. "I missed you papa."
"I missed you too princess."
"Are you staying?"
"You know I can't.."
"Are you taking me with you?"
".. Well.. I uhh.. I can't do that either."
"Why not?"
"Because.. I have to get a lawyer.. and there has to be a hearing.. and.. it could take a while... but I will be visiting you more often... I got an apartment that is only half an hour from you... and... I'm gonna try to convince your mom to let you and your brother spend a couple weekends with me."
"She won't let us."
"Yeah.. well, I don't care what she says.. you're my kids too."
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Post by jacobsmommy on Feb 5, 2007 16:23:29 GMT 10
Great update I hope Eddie fights for custody of his children.
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Post by ERFanRach on Feb 6, 2007 3:23:01 GMT 10
Great Update!!!!
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Post by luby2534 on Feb 6, 2007 5:14:18 GMT 10
Great update !!!
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